log line: awkward young man sits on a bench next to a woman with her lunch next to her. we think that he is attracted to her but in the end he goes for the lunch.
treatment: a man is sitting on a bench (we hear his stomach growl) when an attractive woman sits down next to him, on her lunch break. romantic music is cued in.
he eyes her and she notices him. subtly, she shows him cleavage as she opens her lunch. we see his eyes double take as he tries to look away.
she looks up and catches him staring. he looks away. they awkwardly sit next to each other.
as we are looking at him, we hear her moan. his eyes dart towards her and she is sucking the chocolate off her finger as she holds a pudding cup.
his face shows pain/desire. by now we see him writhing on his bench seat. barely able to contain himself.
she stands up and he freezes. we see her walk away behind a tree slowly, hinting at him to follow her. he just stares at her as we see her leave her lunch behind.
he stands up and the screen fades to black.
fade back in. he is on a rooftop somewhere, happily eating the lady’s lunch. romantic music keep splaying on a more cheerful note.
Wow, hahaha.. This is going to be like that one weird video that was entered in the sf film contest with a man and a woman. The woman thinks the man likes her and starts like eating a muffin and unbuttoning her shirt. At the end we find out the man is blind....and then mistakes the woman for a man..,haha the end. This will be really funny.
ReplyDeleteLAWL. If you do make this, I sure hope we can show it in class without Bigue censorship. The twist is entertaining and is subtle enough not to be figured out by the general audience. You'll have to do some serious camera work and coverage to reach the 3-5 minutes, but I'm sure attention to detail will more than make up for it.
ReplyDeleteWow this is good. the story is great and all but i think you will have problems meeting the 3-5 minute requirement besides that i think that this really shoes the romantic comedy genre. If you can pull it off i think this will be a great short film.
ReplyDeleteVery comedic and kind of makes fun of and parodies the romantic film. Seems a little short to reach a 3 min limit
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